Tuesday, June 5, 2012

Another Dead Darling

Killing those darlings is hard. HARD. But I"m doing it. SLowly. Surely. 
I really really loved this scene. And I"m considering keeping it...but if I do it needs some work. Meaning, it needs to not be what it is now. But, give me a comment or two of validation. Isn't that one line so great? :) No one steal that line. I may need it later. 

No More Detention
I slam my locker as hard as I can.
It bounces back open and my sociology book crashes to the floor.
“Damn it,” I say.
I pick up the book and shove it back in my locker.
I shut it hard, but I don’t try to slam it again.
I feel tears forming on the corners of my eyes.
I will not cry.
I will not cry.
“Sophie, you okay?”
I turn around.
It’s Rex.
Rex Levi.
Shaggy brown hair,
puppy dog brown eyes Rex Levi.
“It’s not true,” I say.
“Don’t worry about it. Those guys are idiots. They’ll say anything.”
We stand there in the hall with three feet of silence between us.

Write on!

1 comment:

  1. I LOVE that line. In fact, it might be one of my favorites. There is a lot that is said in those few words.